Thursday, August 23, 2007

The Little Doll

Sunlight and rays
danced on her face
Engrossed in sleep,
she felt not a trace

Like a little doll,
serene and still
But her eyes, though closed,
seemed to hold a thrill

Her hands clutched too,
in a sense of love
Clutched on a doll
with a little pink glove

She must have woken up,
at least from the sound
Before the house turned
burning gravel on ground

The house used to be taller then,
but now it was the tree.
They say it was in Bombay,
in nineteen ninety three.

Her parents returned
when it was all still and cold
No one remained
alive, they were told

Transfixed yet shattered,
they sat still in emotion
Their eyes giving away
their hearts in commotion

They looked around in debris,
found the doll that never cried
A little doll was safe,
but a little doll had died.


my open iit english creative writing piece :)

19 comments:

  1. hello, I'm meor from malaysia...
    I love to read and write poems... and i find your poem interesting... nice to meet you!!!

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  2. yo bish!!! macha diya! aap to first prize jeetne waale ho[:)]

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  3. Beautiful..........So innocently expressive...

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  4. Marvelous.... absolute beauty !!!
    great work Bishnoi.... bahut bahut accha hai !!!

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  5. Brilliant!

    Not just the flow and the idea but awesome use of words too... rhymed without giving an out-of-place feel :-)

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  6. hmmmm ...

    sale i wouldnt forgive u for not taking me along for the competition .

    but WOW !

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  7. anand1:03 PM

    u make me proud

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  8. Awesome.....it has seesaw of emotions in it.Was th topic given @ the spot...gr8 work yar.I hope you win.

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  9. n last 4 comments ( plus 2 new readers ) .. courtesy of paaul [:D] .. tr8 ?

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  10. beautiful!
    ati sundar!

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  11. meor,
    thanks! :) nice to meet you too (?!)

    bharat!,
    :) :) :)
    abe shuru mein kuch huha nakha rahe the yad hai? raja mantri chor sipahi!! :D

    pushpa,
    thankyouuuu!

    daroga,
    yippie! :) aur amrika thik condition mein hai abhi tak? :P

    Sunnnnnyyyyy!,
    main bhi hairan hu :P

    paul,
    thanks fr wowing..
    aur tmkc

    anand,
    sento kar diya.. :)

    nn,
    han the topic was given on the spot. thanks fr wishing :)

    paul,
    ptg :D

    sam,
    yo! :) thanks.

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  12. he he.. haan amrika waisa hi hai... abhi usko idea nahin hai na ki Daroga aa gaya hai :P

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  13. yooooo!!

    vinnie the P ne tarif ki... man!

    :D

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  14. dear albus .. atleast enlighten us muggles with the full forms of 'tmkc' n 'ptg' . [:D]

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  15. uve been tagged.....write 5 random facts about yourslef and tag 3 more people... (iv nt been tagged yet...)
    :D

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  16. this is an automated comment
    i didn't write this
    its just to keep a regular flow of comments so my blog doesnt feel lonely
    chao

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  17. wow... this is beautifull... sad yet beautiful.. u once visited my blog and left a comment on it... thot id go through urs.. and u write much better than me.. its beautiful. good work....

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  18. thanks arisia! :) glad u liked it

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